The cold air blow a chill through my soul,
but not in the sense of washing it away,
Rather, more like blowing air into a balloon.
The new air refreshes my soul, just as the campfire
below me warms it up.
The outdoors heal my body and spirit
better than any hospital ever could.
The brush of a dragonfly's wings,
the sound of a birdcall resonating over a lake
Revitalize my soul.
The tent pitched by a small campfire
on the edge of a deep and unexplored lake
Open up my spirit for adventure, and helps me to
Revitalize my soul.
THe paddle grasped in my hand propels me onward
to greater freedom and helps my soul
to perch from the lofty crags of wonderment that i have yearned to reach.
But the wilderness is what my soul has wanted
and the wilderness is what my soul has needed.
Because it is the wilderness that will
Revitalize my soul.
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I really like this poem. It's about the profound and positive impact that nature can have on the soul. My favorite line is the first one (the cold air blows a chill through my soul). The image is gentle yet powerful. One suggestion would be to find a way to end your first stanza in the line "revitalize my soul" because all the other stanzas end this way and it just makes sense, pattern-wise.
I really like both your poems and found my self able to relate to what you said in each one. However, I would have to say that "Revitalize my Soul" is my favorite. I feel like the subject of "Revitalize my Soul" is more unique and less overdone than a discussion of passing time. The metaphors and imagery in this poem were just so strong and poignant.
The second poem "Revitalize my soul". The imagery you use makes you feel as though we're with you on this camping trip. Also, I love how you explain the significance of the outdoors and the effect it can have on a person. Nice job mr. creative.
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